the bitter winter moon
contentedly indifferent
to the world's predicament
She harbors no ill will
to those below her
yet we are frozen
by the chill
of her apathetic face.
Great personification in this poem; it makes for a strong metaphorical presentation of thought and concept. But L2 is redundant with the title. It could be cut completely. And the poem would be better for it. You could reiterate the "bitter" but it really isn't needed at all. Like so:
She arises bitter contentedly indifferent to the world's predicament.
Great personification in this poem; it makes for a strong metaphorical presentation of thought and concept. But L2 is redundant with the title. It could be cut completely. And the poem would be better for it. You could reiterate the "bitter" but it really isn't needed at all. Like so:
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contentedly indifferent
to the world's predicament.
a poet friend
RH Peat